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Task 2: In many parts of the world, children are under great academic pressure from parents. What are the causes and the role of parents in educating children?
In many countries around the world, parents have a propensity to put heavy academic pressure on their children. This once emphasizes the important role of parents in bringing up them and the underlying reasons behind this problem are worth of consideration.
To begin with, there are some reasons explaining why children are having that great strain. First and foremost, most parents want their offspring to fulfill their expectations such as good qualifications or to be on top of many academic papers and standardized examinations and tests. As a result, children are forced to study so many subjects at school. Specifically, after they finish their study time in class, due to the fact that they would tend to spend the rest of time playing outdoor or indoor activities or even video games, which contributes to them ignoring their homework, parents send them to crammers or extra classes with the expectations of helping them to concentrate on their studies. Additionally, owing to studying almost a day, children are hoped to top of their classes so that they could have some excellent certificates after graduation, which helps them have good occupations following to parents’ beliefs.
Therefore, we cannot deny the greatly significant role of parents in educating children. They ought to orient children to choose an appropriate path for their life. To be more particular, parents need to show them severe consequences of crimes and anti-social behaviors so that their offspring could be clearly conscious and avoid doing bad works. Furthermore, parents also should set good examples for children via good manners in life such as in communication with people or active lifestyle. Thanks to this, children could mimic them to become a helpful individual. Finally, children have rights to do whatever they enjoy and parents have to assist them to pursue their passions or interests if the things they do are beneficial and not influential in the sense of community.
In conclusion, there are some principal causes contributing to children’s pressure and the vital role of parents need to be extremely taken into consideration to ease that problem.
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How to write cause/effect essays in IELTS?
Cause and effect essay questions in IELTS Writing task 2 give you a problem and ask you to state the main causes of this problem and discuss its possible effects.
In this lesson you will see:
- how to generate ideas for causes and effects
- band 9 answer structure for causes/effects essay
- cause/effect model essay
This is an example of cause/effect IELTS writing task 2 question:
After you’ve read the question, you can clearly determine the problem: growing number of overweight people.
But before you start to write your essay, it’s a good idea to think of 2-3 causes and 2-3 possible effects of the problem.
Causes of obesity:
- inactive lifestyle (relying on cars instead of walking, fewer physical demands at work, inactive leisure activities)
- unhealthy eating habits (eating fast-food, drinking high-calorie beverages, consuming large portions of food, eating irregularly)
Effects of obesity:
- physical health problems
- loss of productivity
- depressions and mental disorders
Now, after we’ve generated the main ideas for causes and effects, it’s time to use these ideas in our essay.
Band 9 answer structure
As you know, there are many ways to structure your essay, but we’ll use a structure that has been approved by many IELTS examiners to be high-scoring and coherent.
Band-9 essay structure:
- Body paragraph 1 - causes
- Body paragraph 2 - effects
Let’s take a look at each of these sections in detail.
Write your introduction in two sentences:
- Sentence 1 - paraphrase the statement (you can use ‘nowadays/today/these days’ to start):
- Sentence 2 - say what you’ll write about in your essay:
Body paragraph 1 - causes
- Sentence 1 - state all the main causes of obesity:
- Sentences 2-3 - describe the first cause. Assume that your examiner has no knowledge in this area and you have to explain all the details to him.
- Sentences 4-5 - describe the second cause. Don’t forget that it’s useful to give examples while describing causes!
Body paragraph 2 - effects
- Sentence 1 - state all the possible effects:
- Sentences 2-3 - explain the first effect and give an example:
- Sentences 4-6 - explain the second effect and support it with an example:
For the conclusion you need simply to restate the problem and sum up the causes and effects that you described in your body paragraphs:
Nowadays the number of overweight people is constantly increasing. This essay will discuss the main reasons of this epidemic and then describe the possible effects of the problem.
In my opinion, the foremost causes of obesity are inactive lifestyle and unhealthy eating habits. Today more and more people rely on cars instead of walking, have less physical demands at work and prefer inactive leisure activities. This results in burning less calories and gaining weight. Moreover, the problem is accentuated by the growing number of people, who eat irregularly and consume large portions of high-calorie food. For example, about 50% of the adult population in Europe with so-called disordered eating suffer from obesity.
The possible effects of this problem include physical health problems and loss of productivity. First of all, obesity results in incorrect functioning of the human body and contributes to the risk of developing some chronic illnesses. For example, as body fat percentage increases, the person’s metabolism worsens, which in turn may result in diabetes or heart diseases. Secondly, overweight people are very unhealthy and often suffer from stress and tiredness. This lessens their work capacity and results in lower productivity. For example, it has been proven that an obese person needs to put more effort to complete some task than a person with normal weight.
To sum up, obesity is a big problem that affects a lot of people nowadays. It’s mainly caused by inactive lifestyle and eating disorders and results in severe health problems and loss of productivity.