Q1. The following is an example of an inappropriate resume. Improve this in a way that makes it presentable to the readers:
1515 Ravi Lane
Nishtar Road Lahore
My goal is to become associated with a company where I can utilize my skills and gain further experience while enhancing the company’s productivity and reputation.
Unilever Pakistan (2012–2017) Sales Representative
• Expand sales by 400%.
• Receive company’s highest sales award four years in a row.
• Develop a training course.
Arbor Shoes (2008–2012) National Sales Manager
• Increase sales from $50 million to $100 million.
• Double sales per representative.
• Suggest new products.
PEL Lahore, Pakistan (2005–2008) District Sales Manager
• Increase regional sales.
• Manage 250 sales representatives.
• Made training course for new recruits — speeding profitability.
Education: B.A. (Business Administration and Computer Science) (2000-2004) UMT Lahore.
Interests: Southbridge Board of Directors, running, gardening, carpentry, Computers, going to clubs, playing the flute.
References: Will be furnished on demand.
Q2. Keeping in mind the principle of conciseness, revise the following sentences to state their meaning in fewer words. Avoid the use of passive voice, repetition and vague phrases
Sr. No. Wordy Sentence Concise Form
For example: Working as a pupil under someone who develops photos was an experience that helped.
me learn a lot. Working as a photo technician's apprentice was an educational
1. During that time period, many car buyers preferred cars that were pink in color and shiny.
in appearance. During that period, many car buyers preferred pink or shiny cars.
2. The microscope revealed a group of organisms that were round in shape and peculiar in nature. The microscope revealed a group of peculiar, round shaped organisms.
3. The politician talked about several of the merits of after-school programs in his speech. The politician touted after-school programs in his speech.
4. Our Website has made available many of the things you can use for making a decision on the best dentist. On our website many things are available to make a decision on the best dentist.
5. On several different occasions, the manager of human relations met with the employees to ascertain whether or not they were in agreement with the company’s policies in regard to
Expence reports. The manager of Human Relations met with employees on three different occasions to discuss expense report policies.
First, I talk on Social Media which has been famous from several years. Social Media became most fastest and popular instrument to communicate together. Therefore, people take it as fruitful and profitable source to spread their thoughts and ideas. Especially electronic social media is performing main role with their features; Facebook one of these, it makes an easiest global communication chain and remove the distance between far peoples. Twitter, Whatsapp, Imo, Skype are also the application producing a network together.
Let’s talk about online business, obviously everyone want to save their time and risk as well specially business class. Online shopping covers both factors very bluntly that’s how it’s being popular in the business people. But in it some disadvantages are most probably noticed general; such that Online company do not fulfill customers desire as they mentioned on their websites, limited specification are having, etc which somehow make customers disappointed.
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